The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the data about the percentage of
the
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people in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom what kinds of products and e-services
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bought within a year. Looking at the graph, it can seem that music, computer equipment and books were the most popular goods in the year and people in the United Kingdom liked online shopping. In more detail, internet book
sales
and computer equipment
sales
in three countries, both over 40% and the music was over 35% as well.
In contrast
to toys and financial services, it is just under 20% in each country. It shows that consumers prefer to purchase entertainment items more Another thing which stands out is that a higher percentage of consumers in the
UK
made an online purchase than Canada and Australia except for toys and financial services. More specifically, the
sales
of books in the
UK
exceeded the other two countries
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one of
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.
Also
, music
sales
show
UK
purchases to be almost
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double of the other countries. Shopping online is popular in the
UK
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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