The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart
ilustrates
how much Correct your spelling
illustrates
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Australian
males
and females
in various age
groups did regular sport
in 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph that
the most Add a missing verb
is that
proportion
of males
doing regular phsical
activity Correct your spelling
physical
were
experienced by 15 to 24 Change the verb form
was
ages
in 2010, Correct your spelling
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whereas
the most popular rate
of females
it were registered by
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in
45
to 54 Correct article usage
the 45
age
group
. Moreover
, the rate
of females
and males
in 65
and over Correct article usage
the 65
age
group
was approximately the same.
As can be seen from the graph, proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
males
doing sport
came top ranking with just above 52% in 15 to 24 in 2010, followed by 65 and over which has a rate
of just under 47%. However
, the most rate
of females
who did regular phsical
activity Correct your spelling
physical
were
shown Change the verb form
was
by
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in
45
to 54 Correct article usage
the 45
age
group
, which account
for slightly over 53%. Correct subject-verb agreement
accounts
Further
, females
in 65
and over Correct article usage
the 65
age
group
did the least physical activity proportion
, which stand
at around 47%, Correct subject-verb agreement
stands
while
males
in 35
to 44 Correct article usage
the 35
age
group
did sport
had the lowest rate
of just under two-fifths.
On the other hand
, 65
and over Correct article usage
the 65
age
group
males
and females
proportion
doing regular sport
made up 46.7 and 47.1% Correct your spelling
respectively
respectivelt
, which had roughly the same Correct your spelling
respectively
proportion
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