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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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The majority of companies nowadays value their employee`s competency,
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 others still pay attention to how their
workers
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 get dressed decently.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and explain companies ought to allow flexibility for
staffs
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 to dress
what
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in what
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 they think is appropriate. From one point, many companies set
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strict
 rules
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about
employee`s
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 wearings,
such
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 as banks or other different organisations. They tend to think that
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strict
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 dressed person will be less
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, whenever they work with clients.
As well as
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 it helps
staffs
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 to
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work
 effectively without any disturbance.
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, if
workers
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 do not follow rules, employers would even give the hoof
employees
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. From another point, other organisations much more have an interest in terms of quality of performance, rather than appearance. Undeniably, when somebody is in either
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a comfortable
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 or
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convenient
 outfit, it will not cause inconvenience towards working hours,
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 think. In my view, each individual should get dressed
according to
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 character, mood or whether they work. A striking example, here, can be
workers
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 in one of the most popular
company
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 in the USA, which is called " Technique".
There all
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 employees can wear whatever they want, so
that
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the main director of
this
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 company John Smtyh believes that by means of any type of clothing may contribute
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workers
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workers'
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creativeness
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 to work effectively.
To conclude
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, a smartly dressed person may probably serve as a main cause of punctuality among clients.
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, without having the best quality of job, the appearance may become invisible to others, in my opinion.
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