The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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The two bar charts illustrate the number of graduates and alums that took part in five different activities during 2008 in the UK.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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further
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studying and part-time
working
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work
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was
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especially popular among all the students.
Also
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in 2008 youth in the UK
was
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not interested in volunteering. In 2008 almost 30000 of the graduates continued their studies at university,
while
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only 3,500 of them did volunteering. After college 17,735 of
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this
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these
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students worked part-time and 16,235 were unemployed. Most of the postgraduates continued their studies (2,725) or had part-time
works
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work
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(2,535 after college in 2008.
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, there were 1,625 unemployed students and less than 1000 of
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then
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them
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did
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apply
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volunteering
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volunteered
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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