Recently some people can work from home using modern technology. Some think this is only benefits workers, but not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that with
advancement
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the advancement
of new
technology
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, working from
home
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has becoming
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is becoming
has become
possible in today's era.
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, some people think that the development of
technology
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only brought benefits for the worker but not the
employer
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. While I agree with that statement, I believe that not only workers would gain advantages but
also
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to the employers. With the development of modern
technology
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such
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as internet, mobile phone, 'tablet'
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
, working from
home
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has brought some
beneficial
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benefits
for workers to carry on their tasks effectively and efficiently.
Technology
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has provide
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has provided
worker with the freedom to start their shift. For instant, employee does not have to worry
of
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about
getting to
work
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late. Not only that, working from
home
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with modern
technology
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would
also
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safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
their time
in commuting from
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commuting from home
home
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to office.
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additionally
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Additionally
, in olden days, for workers to send an important document, they may have to type with
typewriter
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a typewriter
and send it via post.
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However now
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However, now
, workers are able to use
technology
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such
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as Microsoft Word to do editing and perhaps sent the document via email which only take few
second
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to reach the recipients. Not only benefits the workers,
technology
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could
also
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bring advantages to them
employer
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in many ways.
Firstly
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, employers
does not have
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do not have
to spend their money on expenditure. Apart from saving money for expenditure,
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employer
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the employer
an employer
could
also
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save money from setting up
meeting
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meetings
a meeting
which may require
venue
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a venue
, refreshment, etc. Whereas with the availability of
technology
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, meeting can be done via video conferencing.
Secondly
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, many
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technology
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technological
gadget
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gadgets
that are available now are portable, handy and very reliable and because of these features, employers could perform their
work
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at anytime and anywhere and with that, they do not need to go to
office
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the office
to do their
work
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.
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,
technology
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such
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as
internet
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the internet
is a good source of information and it cost nothing to publish or access information on the internet. For the reasons mentioned above, modern
technology
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not only bring benefits for
the workers
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workers, but
but
also
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bring advantages to the
employer
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who prefer to
work
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from
home
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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