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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
A vast majority of our adult life is spent working;
hence
 some support the idea that huge payment should be prioritized over
job
 fulfillment.
While
 financial remuneration is a crucial
factor
 that attracts individuals towards a specific
work
, I disagree that it is the most significant
factor
 that makes a
job
 ideal.
Firstly
, the importance of financial security cannot be undermined in the modern materialistic world. Since a vast majority of people earn their livelihood from their workplace, it will be difficult for individuals with a single source of income, to make
their
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ends meet, from underpaid jobs.
Thus
 low-paid employees, because of their financial burdens, may not be able to offer dedication and commitment to their career, which, in turn, results in under-performance.
Secondly
, the educated refrain from
the
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employment in jobs with
meager
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 incomes as these are less attractive.
Hence
, the remuneration associated is an important
factor
 that determines the value of a particular
job
.
On the other hand
, to glorify higher
earning
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 as the sole determiner of an ideal
job
 is incorrect.
This
 is because various other factors, namely
work
 and life balance,
working place
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 culture and adequate recognition contribute towards satisfaction and contentment in
work
. Henceforth, an astronomically higher paying
job
 with a demanding employer, with poor social life in a tedious
work place
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 environment will lead to higher
job
 dissatisfaction, which
also
 promotes higher attrition. From the above justifications, it can be stated that apart from financial remuneration, which is a major determiner of a good occupation,
job
 satisfaction is
also
 an equally important associated
factor
 that determines the value of a specific
job
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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