Some people feel that certain worders like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do.

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It is believed that working as nurses, doctors, and teachers offer people humble pay off while film actors and company bosses are overwhelmingly well-paid regardless of the amount of their work. I totally agree with
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phenomenon for several reasons, yet hold a believe that
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professionals should be evaluated in a better way.
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of all, it is undeniable that nurses, doctors, and teachers deserve to earn high income due to their professional knowledge and skills. These professionals, so the argument goes, have made great effort in speculating their
specialty
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Specialty
and sacrificing their private time serving the society.
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, when it comes to risks in
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the reputation
of a whole group that they are working
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, these professionals would take less responsibility than their managers as these seniors are the one deciding an on-going operation of the firm.
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, a huge income earned by leaders is completely equivalent to their ability in executing.
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of all, it is asserted that gaining a large sum of money no longer depends on which career, especially in a modern economic society. Here, a comparison can be made between professionals and entertainment performers in place that the former career allows people limited opportunities whereas the latter offers us more intercultural affairs. Giant businesses are willing to pay millions for ones having a potential in making a huge profit, and
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film actors are the perfect sources that can play a perfect role of an ambassador for their products. In conclusion, while entertainment performers and company managers deserve great sums of money in payment
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their work, professions in
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the health service
and education should be paid based on the standard that they belong to, based on the quantity of working time as well as the range of work they can cope with.
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