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you have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: Give details of your stay What were the high & low points of the hotel What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel

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Dear
SIr
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, My name is Gautam Narain SInghani. I have just returned home after spending 3 nights at your
hotel
 in Mumbai and my
room
 number was 3333. The staff members were friendly and cooperative and the location was very convenient.
However
, I am utterly disappointed with the
room
 facilities. As I had visited
the
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Mumbai at peak summers, which was around 44 degrees Celsius, it was very hot and humid in my
room
 and on top of it, the air conditioning system was not working properly. Because of the extreme heat, I had to keep open my
room
 windows and
hence
 it was very noisy as the
hotel
 was on the main road. Due to
this
, I got very little sleep during my stay at your
hotel
. I would like to suggest you
to
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keep checking the cooling system of the rooms regularly, to make
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 comfortable for the visitors at your
hotel
. Perhaps, you could consider giving me some discount on my
next
 holiday visit
at
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 your
hotel
. I hope to hear from you soon. Regards, Gautam Narain Singhani
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