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Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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It is true that companies have prioritized candidates’ degrees over their life experience and personalities during the recruitment process. There are two main reasons for
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 trend, and in my opinion, its disadvantages considerably outweigh the advantages. I acknowledge that the option
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 considering candidates’ academic degrees to be the most essential recruitment criterion is appealing for two major reasons.
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, academic qualifications speak a volume of candidates’ knowledge. In fact, when they pursue higher education, they have to study a wide range of academic subjects which provide them with a mountain of understanding about the fields they would work for after graduation.
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 as teachers, or doctors, academic qualifications are reliable evidence to showcase a major-related grasp of candidates.
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, they are skillfully and carefully trained to prepare for their career prospects when they are still at university or institutions. Personally, I hold a strong belief that
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 trend is completely negative. One of the most significant disadvantages is that companies are more likely to miss
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 candidates if they put too much focus on formal education background. More noticeably, life experience and characteristics would play an important role in dealing with unexpected situations
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 as handling customers’ complaints. Another disadvantage to consider is some qualification-related issues
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 as fake bachelor’s degrees would gain increasing popularity in the job-hunting market. Some candidates would buy degrees illegally to be qualified for vacancies and pass the CV testing round. To conclude, in my view,
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 possessing a degree is of great importance, I do not think selecting candidates should hugely depend on
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized measure
  • specialized expertise
  • dedication
  • long-term goal
  • higher education
  • practical skills
  • adaptability
  • problem-solving abilities
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • homogeneous
  • diverse perspectives
  • negative development
  • inequality
  • valuable skills
  • insights
  • balanced approach
  • proficiency
  • safety standards
  • candidate's profile
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