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Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

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In the current scenario, working couples are on the rise and it is considered by some that it is considered by some people that the
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 of various household
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 should be shared by both men and women. I agree with the people as it will allow the couple to complete the
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 timely, having ample
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 for other recreational activities.
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, doing household
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 together infuse a sense of
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, care and love for each other which could generate positive vibes in the environment.
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Also, when
 the
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 is completed in
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, it will allow the couple to spend some quality
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 together and with other members of the family. It is difficult for women to manage
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 at two different places, office as well as home, making her life stressful.
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 can have a detrimental effect on women’s health and can decrease the efficiency at
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. If a couple shares the
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 of domestic life, they will be imparting good human values to their children, as they will learn to respect and help their elders, sharing a stronger bond of compassion. When
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 is shared, a woman can get
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 for herself,
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 that she can focus on her well-being, which will add to her personality, making her more confident and lively. In the end, I would say that sharing
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 of household
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 should be encouraged among working couples so that they can have some quality
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 together doing innumerable recreational activities.
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