Directors and managers of organizations are often older people. Some people say that it is better for younger people to be leaders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

To begin
with I am sorry for bothering you with
this
message,
however I
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however, I
am in need of letting you know my
situation
. I am completely aware of the tough
situation
that students like me are dealing with and I know that as me many students might be begin for
this
support.
However I
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However, I
want you to take a minute of your time to read my personal
situation
. Before of the virus I managed to find a really good position in the cleaning industry, I had a legal job with flexible schedule and well paid.
By contrast
, once the virus
started I
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started, I
loss my job straight away and
therefore
my incomes, I was paying all my tuition fees on time until I faced
this
situation
. I would like to be brief, I tried tot
apply
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to apply
applying
for the
first
study buddy program, by the time a received the emails I applied because I knew how hard everything was about to be.
Unfortunately I
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Unfortunately, I
was not selected, Even though I had all the requirements to fulfil the position. I do not want to jump in the
details but
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details, but
either my grades or attendance
are
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is
in accordance with the requirements. As I was
not selected I
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not selected, I
could not receive any support to pay the
second
fee, luckily I managed to
paid
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pay
it with my saving.
However
, now the
situation
is completely different and I am struggling to pay
this
coming tuition fee as it has been almost three months without getting any income. I am aware of the massive number of students in need around all your locations in Australia, and unfortunately just 80 students will succeed. I do not have other option rather that write
this
emails
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email
to seek for an economic support,
otherwise
I am afraid the my visa could be potentially cancelled. Once again, I am completely sorry for having the nerve to write
this
and I hope you understand my current
situation
.
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