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The most important factor in job satisfaction is salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#factor #job #satisfaction #salary
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It is true that people usually opt for a high
salary
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 and do not choose satisfaction while selecting a
job
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.
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 remuneration is important, I believe, having good colleagues are
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 a fundamental aspect considered by many people while choosing a
job
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. On the one hand, I agree, income from a
job
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 is a crucial factor often deemed by the employee when they choose a
job
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 to a certain extent. To elucidate, getting income from their work, employees are allowed to do expenses like food, housing, education and health care, which are increasing year after year. If an employee’s
salary
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 is not enough to meet the basic needs, their life will be extremely affected.
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, a recent article in the New York Times reported that despite having the unfavourable condition, the majority of Americans gave preference to
salary
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 option rather than satisfaction owing to the increasing cost of living.
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, I
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 believe that friendly colleagues are too important to consider.
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 is because, often employees tend to wish to have a companion in the office who are co-operative and helpful all the time, and
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 increases their morale and enthusiasm toward their work.
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, an article by the Indian Working Association in May 2019 stated that in spite of getting inadequate salaries from work, 30% of employees refused to change their jobs due to having amiable colleagues.
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 has resulted in focusing on their jobs. In conclusion,
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 undoubtedly
salary
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 keeps matter to a person in order to fulfil the basic needs, having a supportive colleague is
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 important as it allows them to continue with their current
job
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.
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