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Some People believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is argued that teenagers ought to focus on all school curriculum. While others opined that teenagers should concentrate on the subjects in which they show
most interest
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more interest
 or performed well.
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 essay agrees that
teenager
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 should focus on
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subject
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the subject
a subject
subjects
 of their interest.
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 essay will discuss the both viewpoints; followed by reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, many people who are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of all subjects should be focused by teenagers say that passing mark of any class constitute on all subjects rather than on
single
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a single subject
single subjects
subject
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.
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, passing marks of 5th grade class is 55%, a student cannot pass the class just taking 55% in one
subject
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 and failed in others. The total result will take all subjects
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 account.
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, if
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teenager
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a teenager
teenagers
the teenager
 will focus on all subjects it will give
overall perspective
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an overall perspective
 of all fields ranging from sciences to economics.
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, a
teenager
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 who
have
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has
 knowledge of all subjects, he can apply it daily life and help around people on
daily basis
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a daily basis
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, some people believe that if a
teenager
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 focused only the subjects that they are good at or those appealed them, they will be able to be more focused towards their future goals.
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, if a
teenager
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 is brilliant in chemistry, he will able to pursue his careers to be a scientist and do wonders rather he become
economist
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economical
.
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, by focusing on subjects on which
teenager
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feel
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feels
 confident will enrich him with confidence and self-achievement.
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,
report
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a report
 published by a reputed newspaper that
teenager
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 who focused on their interested subjects will achieve more in life as compared to other teens. In conclusion, while the benefits of to focus on all
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subject
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subjects
 cannot be overlooked,
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, not at the cost of
teenager
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’s future prospect by focusing on the subjects of their interest.
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