It has been claimed that workers over 50 years are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own experience of knowledge.

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The belief that employees over 50 years that
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in contemporary offices do not react positively to changes and because of
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opportunities are passed on to their younger colleagues. I agreed totally
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the above as older colleagues tend to be stuck in the past ways of doing their
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that they miss out on career and
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improvements training
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
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and new ideas. They feel that the way things were done during their prime was better and more effective. Most of the older workers are enmeshed in their responsibilities with no time for learning new things, are not abreast of the latest changes in their professions. So when fresh ideas or opportunities are presented at
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, they resent it because of lack of knowledge and inability to interact with the new and radical changes in the
proffession
the body of people in a learned occupation
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of a food processing company opposed the new idea of shortening the production process by 5 hours cutting out 5 obsolete machines and introducing one machine that can do the
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of the 5
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machines. He came up with several reasons why that would be
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the state or fact of existing
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shown various examples of other companies that have adopted same machines and increased
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with the new machine. The junior worker is now managing the new process. Most workers over 50years oppose new knowledge and innovation because they feel they know better and have the experience to show for it. They are more reluctant to take risks and are adverse to charting the unknown.
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