The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two pie charts represent how different industry sectors contributed to the economy of Turkey
percentage wise
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in 2000 and 2016. The
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economic contributions increased and decrease in some industries. Some industry sectors did reduce, like the government, which decreased by 3%,
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agriculture by 10%, and
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Leisure and Hospitality by 3%. In 2000,
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agricultural production was the most successful sector, which contributed by 24% in the recession that year.
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the least commerce
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construction which accounted for 3%.
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Leisure and hospitality had an equal chunk of 17% of the contributions just as the healthcare and education
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. The government gave out 12%, the Trade, Utilities and transportation gave out 14%, the finance, Business and other provided 5%, and manufacturing provided 8%.
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2016 things didn't change much
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the Turkish recession.
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a couple of industries experienced a cutback in their contributions.
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decreased harshly by 10%, from 24% to 14% the government sector to see a decline of about 3%. The Healthcare and Education system stayed as it is with a contribution of 17%. Finance, business and other
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from 5% in 2006 to 8% in 2016. Construction had a 7% increase to reach 10%.
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