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Some people think that employers should give staff at least four weeks holiday per year to improve their job performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent times
vacation
's duration is
sa
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
a
so
 topic of a lot of discussions. While some people think
ths
denotes a person or thing
this
 period should
last
 at least four weeks, others
stronly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
 disagree.
This
 essay strongly agrees with the demand for monthly holiday as it both enables employees to stay motivated and cares about their health. The primary reason why
time
 of rest should be at least four
week
Suggestion
weeks
 long is that it augments the
prodcutivity
the quality of being productive or having the power to produce
productivity
 of people. When
inviduals
a human being
individuals
 do not have a proper
vacation
, they are being overworked and,
consequently
, less productive. If
this
 is a case, they are not able to provide any sufficient and reasonable solutions for the problems for companies, which they work for.
Moreover
,
this
 situation can lead to professional burnout in the early age of
carrer
someone whose employment involves carrying something
carrier
career
.
As a result
, people in their middle age do not have any idea for their future professional life. Keeping in mind the employee's health is another factor which states for
longer
Suggestion
a longer vacation
longer vacations
vacation
. Lack of proper
time
 to
rest can
Accept comma addition
rest, can
 result not only in worse frame of
mind but
Accept comma addition
mind, but
 it may cause a mental disorder.
Additionally
, individuals often desire to keep work-life balance. Especially those, who have families crave for
longer
Suggestion
longer vacations
a longer vacation
vacation
, because spending
time
 with their children is the most effective method to
strentghten
make strong or stronger
strengthen
 a bond between parent and a child. The best example
for
Suggestion
of
 that statement is Germany. In
this
 country the duration of
vacation
 is very short.
This
 factor is
stronly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
 connected with the
unhapiness
emotions experienced when not in a state of well-being
unhappiness
, which was revealed by a variety of surveys conducted on german people. To conclude, the period of
time
 dedicated for
vacation
 should
last
 at least four weeks, because it increases employee's productivity and have a positive impact on their frame of mind.
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