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Some people think that it would be better for larger companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think advantages overweigh disadvantages?

Some people often thought that moving larger companies and industries to regional areas outside large urban centres. I completely agree with the statement as
both
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 companies and the public has certain benefits on
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 migrations.
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, the expenses of
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 industries and the employees will be cut off due to the
decentralisation
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Decentralisation
. Companies get the benefit of getting logistics and labour at very low costs and the cost of living for the employees will be
affordable
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afforded
.
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, due to urbanisation most of the workers are shifting to cities where they can have enough choices of getting jobs and as wells as companies are
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encouraging
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encouraged
 labour to move out of their locality for their evolution and
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 concentration of opportunities could spread throughout rural areas as well to reduce the load on cities.
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, there will be disadvantages of the shift. Majorly, the
transportation
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would
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 become a most vulnerable issue in
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 scenario. A majority of
transportation
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 means like shipping, railways, etc.
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 be a challenge to the management.
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, if an iron casting industry is located at the far end of the ports, it might be a hectic task for the
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 in terms of
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 time and financially.
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, locating industries in a proper area will
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 play a key role in avoiding
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 challenges. To conclude, industries and companies in rural areas help
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 management and employees affordable the logistics and cost of living respectively. Mitigating the risk of
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 during area selection will be more advantageous.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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