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traffic and housing problems in major cities can be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #cities #companies #factories #employees #countryside
The world has seen an industrial revolution in the recent past, which
also
 has created an imbalance in town planning. Experts suggest that moving heavy industries to the outskirts of the city, provided with the flexibility to their employees would bring the situation under control.
However
,
this
 will definitely have its own merits which cannot be disagreed. On one hand, it cannot be overlooked that industries had played a vital role in the development of cities. Many settlements were constructed for employees around the factory area, which not only helped to reach them on time but
also
 reduced the attrition rate for the employers. With an enormous rise of industries and employment
,
Accept space
,
 a failure in the town planning can be clearly seen with heavy traffic jams and road maintenance.
On the other hand
, the town planning department is coming up with a plan to move all the industries to the countryside,
this
 would not only create a partition for residential and industrial complex, but
also
 provides the sense of safety to the citizens.
Moreover
,
this
 could
also
 be an environment friendly plan.
Nevertheless
,
Accept space
,
moving to a new location all together could be a tough situation for the people residing in their home for a while. To conclude, moving industries to the countryside with their employees would be a great idea, but could be a challenging situation for those residing for a longer duration in the city, but people can get used to in shorter span of time. For greater good,
such
 things can be overlooked.
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