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Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so.

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It is becoming a trend nowadays for children doing a
part
time
job
 in their leisure
time
 and
this
 phenomena
is supported
Suggestion
are supported
 by the parents. Even though
this
 activity brings beneficial effects for them, it can be followed by several drawbacks. In
this
 era, young people need to be introduced to the real work life in early
time
 to understand the efforts of earning
money
. By experiencing a
part
time
job
, children get the mindset that
money
 comes along with an amount of energy to work on something so that they will be more grateful. The
second
 advantage of doing
part
time
job
 is children being more independent. It happens because the child feels the chance to obtain their own
money
 and manage it by their own authority so that their independent side grows well. I take an example, my parents used to give me a pack of petty cash once in a
week
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week, then
then
 after I worked on a
part
time
job
, I could save
money
 so that my parents could reduce their allowance for me. In other hand, children can feel exhausted because of their
part
time
job
 so that they do not have enough
time
 to study and rest. It can influence their concentration in the school.
For instance
, they spent their
time
 to do their
job
 for at least four to five hours after school,
then
 they will go home at least at night and the
next
 morning they will come to school at 07.30 or 08.00 so that it is common to find children being sleepy in their class.
In addition
, children can
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 their free
time
 because they use it for doing a certain
job
. Overall, it can be good for children to experience the
part
time
job but
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job, but
 it
can
Suggestion
can also bring
also
 brings any disadvantages.
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