Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion.

Smokers are fairly common in our everyday life, most companies and closed environment as well as government encourages or even bans smoking
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in their spaces. Despite I totally stay opposite site for
smoking but
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smoking, but
smokers definitely have their right to consume their cigarette
therefore
banning smoking in all public places would be an inappropriate method and possibly cause
huge
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a huge impact
impact
throughout the society.
First
at
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of
all, smoking cigarette definitely relieve the stress of people during the process, they can
free
start firing a weapon
fire
out their mind and prepare for later work they would face. If smoking banned all over the public place, worker and officers cannot relieve their stress and so lead to anxiety or even some worse mental issues.
Secondly
, banning smoking
at
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in
all open
area
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areas
could
impact
tobacco industry because the demands of cigarettes would decrease as lesser people are smoking and potentially causes the worker in
such
industry lost their work
thus
causing "depression" in
economy sector
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the economic sector
economic sector
.
Moreover
, the taxes for government would be reduced as
tobacco industry
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the tobacco industry
and consumption of cigarettes contributes much fund for them so the infrastructures and public sector cannot well maintained and development of
country
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the country
will be slow down eventually harms the community in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
way
instead
of health condition. In the other hand, smoking cigarettes in public cause people around
smoker
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the smoker
feels uncomfortable and plenty of
researches
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research
shows that the
second
-hand smokes
causes
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cause
worse
impact
to people around
smoker
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the smoker
than smoker himself. Don’t even mention that smoking causes disease
to
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of
upper respiratory system
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the upper respiratory system
and malignant cancer that shorten the lifetime of an individual and reduce the quality afterlife. In a nutshell,
although
smoking
does making
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does make
makes
negative
impact
toward
society especially
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society, especially
in
health but
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health, but
banning them without too much consideration would
causes
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cause
worse effect, the way is taking the action in appropriate way
instead
of taking it excessively.
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