These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays a number of families immigrate to abroad because they believe that oversea have more job opportunities in comparison of own country. As a matter of fact, children from these families will face both pros and cons. On one hand, there is no question about it that moving abroad will give children a better opportunity for their education, especially if they emigrate to developed countries
such
as, America, England, Japan and so forth. Their government has more attention to the education program.
Besides
, the children will face new culture and can learn about history and custom which can be very funny and informative. Another thing working abroad would offer them better opportunity to earn money and raise their children better.
As a result
, their children will have a better living condition to develop.
On the other hand
moving to other countries have some negative effect on children,
for example
, struggle with new language which maybe they cannot manage it or a group of children get depression, which the main causes is getting away from their friends or some of them can not get along with new culture and condition. In my point of view transfer to other countries have several benefits and drawback. In my opinion at
first maybe
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first, maybe
children have some problem, but after while they get along with the new situation and understand that in future, the benefit more than the drawback.
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