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Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion.

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I agree with
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 opinion. It is not bad for employers to pay attention to the
health
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 of their employees, even if they use the company’s funds. If a person cannot be healthy, he cannot do anything. Employers
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 used the company’s funds to help them recover. In the following paragraphs, I intend to discuss both views followed by my opinion. Some employers think about the
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 of their employees and spend the funds of their company’s on various sports clubs and gyms to help their employees stay healthy and
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 effectively.
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, people need to do sports for their
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.
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, if they go to sports clubs and gyms, everyone will start to feel better and will be stronger. Another advantage of doing sports is that it makes people’s bodies more beautiful.
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, they do their
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 effectively.
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, the disadvantages that some employers think that
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 benefit did not
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. Any employer should think about the employee. If their employees’
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 is not in place, he cannot provide services possible. I do not think they spend a lot of money if they put their employee in sports clubs and gyms. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, employers healthier sadden have pros and cons. In my opinion, everyone should pay attention to the
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 of the others. It is very good for employers to put their employees in sports clubs and gyms from the fund of their companies. If the employees are well energized and
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 effectively, the employers will not regret the money they paid.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidized membership
  • physical activity
  • energy levels
  • employee productivity
  • work performance
  • sick leaves
  • healthier lifestyle
  • absenteeism
  • employee morale
  • workplace environment
  • employee retention
  • corporate image
  • branding
  • health and wellness benefits
  • top talent
  • healthcare costs
  • medical intervention
  • lack of usage
  • underutilization
  • alternative wellness programs
  • mental health resources
  • flexible working hours
  • professional development
  • individual responsibility
  • corporate responsibility
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