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You are looking for part-time work. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter introduce yourself say what skills and work experience you have explain the sort of job you are looking for

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In recent years, the technological revolution presented an enormous invention to humanity which is
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computer
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, there have many advantages
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 as remote working or learning, but there has a downside
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, in
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 of all, the innovation of
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computer
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the computer
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 considers one of the most successful creations in our era, as there are numerous advantages result from it,
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 as the ability to study even if you are away overseas because the barriers have been smashed,
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, I had certified MBA master from Oxford Cambridge in London, while I live in my home country which is Egypt,
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, the long-distance is no longer crucial, and
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, the rate of online education has been raised because the world has become a small village as you can communicate, work, learn wherever the place is located as long as you have a
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 plugged to the internet.
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, no one can deny the importance of
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, there is an opposite view for some
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, the more
people
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 use the
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 the more isolation will increase in the society,
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 survey which runs by MSA university claimed that 60% of kids who are using a
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 regularly have become more introvert than other kids who not using the
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 and in order to avoid
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 harmful we need to limit the use of computers,
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, for kids. To sum up, the debatable matter will
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 regarding the most important inventions in
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 years, the majority of
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 agreed on it would be the
computer
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, as our life has been affected dramatically since the invention of it,
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, I
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 with the same point of view of
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.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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