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You are looking for part-time work. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter introduce yourself say what skills and work experience you have explain the sort of job you are looking for

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In recent years, the technological revolution presented an enormous invention to humanity which is
a
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the
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computer
, there have many advantages
such
 as remote working or learning, but there has a downside
also
, in
this
 essay, we will elaborate on the importance of the
computer
.
First
 of all, the innovation of
computer
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the computer
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 considers one of the most successful creations in our era, as there are numerous advantages result from it,
such
 as the ability to study even if you are away overseas because the barriers have been smashed,
for example
, I had certified MBA master from Oxford Cambridge in London, while I live in my home country which is Egypt,
therefore
, the long-distance is no longer crucial, and
as a result
, the rate of online education has been raised because the world has become a small village as you can communicate, work, learn wherever the place is located as long as you have a
computer
 plugged to the internet.
However
, no one can deny the importance of
computer
, there is an opposite view for some
people
, the more
people
 use the
computer
 the more isolation will increase in the society,
for instance
, the
last
 survey which runs by MSA university claimed that 60% of kids who are using a
computer
 regularly have become more introvert than other kids who not using the
computer
 and in order to avoid
such
 harmful we need to limit the use of computers,
in particular
, for kids. To sum up, the debatable matter will
last
 regarding the most important inventions in
last
 years, the majority of
people
 agreed on it would be the
computer
, as our life has been affected dramatically since the invention of it,
therefore
, I
convinced
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am convinced
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 with the same point of view of
people
.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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