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Some people believe that men and women are equal so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain job which are not suitable for women. what is your opinion?

#people #men #women #job
Men and women are equal in all the aspects, women should get
similar oppurtunity
Suggestion
a similar opportunity
similar opportunity
similar opportunities
 as men to pursue their own interests and take up any profession that they like. Given a fact that
both
 the sexes are gifted with same intelligent quotient and bravery. Primarily,
both
 men and women have
same intelligent quotient
Suggestion
a same intelligent quotient
, learning and adapting abilities which provides them with the freedom to take up employment in the field which attracts them. We have female
sceintists
a person with advanced knowledge of one or more sciences
scientists
 and Doctors who are relatively same or even better in skills than their male counterparts. Secondarily, ladies are equally brave as compared to
gents
Suggestion
the gents
 in doing any type of work, as we get to see many lady officers in army, navy,
airforce
Suggestion
air force
 and many
adminstrative
of or relating to or responsible for administration
administrative
 services. Women even are capable of reaching
moon
Suggestion
the moon
. To summarise,
both
 men and women are identical to one another, be it in any field given a task
both
 of them are able to perform alike, in my opinion women are not inferior to men in any way.
Both
 of them should be treated and respected equally and
also
 should get enough freedom to select a profession of their own choice. IQ
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