Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of people arguing about why some science subjects are worth learning than art-based subjects.

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, there are so many different reasons why art should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. As per some educators, it can improve students' productivity in other subjects. I totally agree with

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academic performance. Research about

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was carried out in 2012 showed that activities

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students to gain other achievements apart from academic accomplishments during their school life. Not surprisingly, the students who often turn up many arts performances get valuable experiences which quite different from serious learning activities that are only used to focusing on writing, reading, and counting skills.

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, it will enhance their other abilities.

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, the world needs more inventors, artists, painters, performers, and musicians as much as doctors and engineers. Students who study in schools that do not have

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subjects tend to develop a narrow view of the world.

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, students who are exposed to arts tend to have a broader view of the world.

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, when we have art-based lessons at secondary school, we can find early talented students, orientate, and develop their skills. To sum up, art-based educations must be compulsory and can greatly add value to secondary education as well as the career prospects of young graduates.

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