Some people feel that entertainers(pop singers film starts and sports starts)are paid too much money.do you agree or disagree.which other types of job should be highly paid?

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certain people have the notion that celebrities
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as pop singers, actors and sports stars are getting a handsome amount of
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compare to other professionals. I agree with
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viewpoint and
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have the perception that other service industry professional
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as doctors
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police
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and the army are
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should get paid decent remuneration in comparison with their Paramount services to the
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entertainers have brought the potential business prospect to oneself and to the business they are associated with,
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, the giant corporate’s would like to liaise with them to to utilise the fame and popularity they own.
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they charge exorbitant price for the performances.Owing to
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they lead a luxury lifestyle and
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it will create pay parity and inequality within the same industry and
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intact.
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a lead actor will get the opulence amount of
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actors would not get the same remuneration.
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entertainment is not a necessary requirement in in a
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. Giving much importance to celebrities rather than other professionals will lead detrimental effect on
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, many teenagers are influenced by the film actors or pop singer's lifestyle and try to replicate or follow their path only in the motive of huge
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the celebrities make,
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they leap into depression if they cannot accomplish and many anecdotes prove that only a few would survive and achieve
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path of success. Ostensibly, other professional
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as doctors, policemen
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army men and farmers should be appreciated and uplift them due to the extensive service they have provided to their respective fields
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though it has been observed that people are thankless to them.In many underdeveloped and developing countries, farmers are leaving their life miserably. To illustrate
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countries like India chiefly depended on agriculture
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infrastructure and other factors made them to live the life in poverty to a large extent
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food is the basic necessities of life
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government and public should consider the wellness of them to the utmost priority. In conclusions
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it has been said that celebrities are getting too much
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while other service industry employees are being ignored henceforth it depicts the imbalance of a
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a well-balanced
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should appreciate and consider other professions
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as farming, teaching, military services since it is fundamentally significant to any nation's growth.
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