The government should focus on its economy or social services?

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People have different views about government must motivate
national economy
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the national economy
instead
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of public supplies. In my opinion, I support the view that improving citizen’s lives is more significant than the former. On the one hand, creating a worth-living environment in which people live in peace, justice and
respectation
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is a sustainable factor to develop
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country
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the country
. It is the fact that a
country
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, which has a well
education
Suggestion
educated
, healthcare systems, always attracts many foreign investors and tourists leading to more profits than those political
unstability
an unstable order
instability
instabilities
.
For example
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, according to World Trade Organization’ record in 2010, Vietnam, a stable
country
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in the Southeast Asia, had earned annual more than $ 3 trillion with tourism.
By contrast
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, the Middle East countries, which always experience in civil wars, became poorer and poorer because no one
invest
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invests
in these internal unstable nations. The less
dispution
breaking up and scattering by dispersion
dissipation
, the more revenue.
On the other hand
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, there are several reasons why
authorities
Suggestion
the authorities
should not concentrate much on national economy
instead
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of
improving their people
Suggestion
people improving their
living standard.
First
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, if a
country
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earns more money without developing their infrastructure, they would soon face to civil war because the distance between rich and poor civilian will be far. As an illustration, India is the
country
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in which they don’t have any
skyscraper but
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skyscraper, but
they include
both of the richest
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both the richest
and the poorest person in the world.
Secondly
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, people who were excellently educated and well
healthy cared
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healthy, cared
are likely to work hard and get more taxes for government.
That is
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,
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
taking care more about social services will be returned by their citizens. In conclusion, I strongly believe that government should
spent
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spend
more
effords
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
efforts
to
Suggestion
in
on
developing the infrastructure and national society because of the above reasons.
This
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will create a worth-living and powerful
country
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.

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