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Some people say that self employment is better than a job in a company or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your own opinion.

#people #self #employment #job #company #institution #modes #work
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Since, in
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 modern
era it
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era, it
 becomes
arduous task
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an arduous task
 for humans to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their basic needs,
therefore
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 they need to have a secure source of income. A part of
crowd accord
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a crowd accord
the crowd accord
 that running a
business
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 is having its own benefits which
job
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 in
company
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 lacked for. I firmly support the given notion as being an
enterprenur
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneur
person
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 can have numerous advantages
such
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 as
one
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 would have no need to follow someone else's orders and can
work
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 independently. To embark with, self employed
person
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 can choose the field of
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job according
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job, according
 to his interest and
also
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 can invest as per their budget.
For example
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, if a
person
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 is a good
painter he
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painter, he
 can open his own art gallery and can make money through it.
Moreover
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, when a
person
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have
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has
 his own
company
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 he would not answerable to anyone for his mistakes unlikely the
job
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 in
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company
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the company
a company
.
Furthermore
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, while running a
business
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one
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 can have a flexible hour as well as setting, which will aid him to have
healthy family life
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a healthy family life
. To illustrate, while working from home
one
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 can spend time with family and
also
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 can do house chores.
Likewise
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, in some sort of
business
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 all the family members could be involved, that aid them to avoid any stress to hunt for
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job
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jobs
a job
. To exemplify, my friend's mother is running a boutique, where her father is a cashier, while
she
of a female
her
work
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 as stock manager in
this
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 way the whole family are working all together and are employed.
On the other hand
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,
job
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 gives a sense of financial security, since
one
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 will always get his salary credited whether the
company
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 is in profit or loss.
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, it gives an identity
to
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of
 the employee in the organization he is working in. Along with it, the
person
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 gets promotion according to his performance, which motivate him to
work
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 harder. In summary, I assert that, it is irrefutable that
job
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 in a
company
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always push
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always pushes
 employees to give their best to grow within
organization
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the organization
an organization
organizations
,
however
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business
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the business
have
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has
 numerous benefits that make it more preferring mode of
work
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.
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