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The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Internet
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The internet
 has surely transformed our lives forever. About 50 years back, there was no
way
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 to know what was going on in different parts of the
world
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, and we would have to rely on daily newspapers for the news to reach us once a day in the morning.
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 essay discusses the pros and the cons of the
internet
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, in relation to, if and how it has affected our thought process and changed our behavioural patterns, while adding
values
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value
 to the
way
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 we live and the economy. The
world
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 was a different place before the
internet
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, which
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 meant that people lived a slow, mundane and enclosed
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
 interacting only with their own circle and communities. The exposure to different cultures and thoughts was limited, but that
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 meant, you could differentiate each one due to their uniqueness. The advent of
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internet
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the internet
 brought about a massive change. The
world
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 felt smaller than it was and people were exposed to different opinions and voices. Over time, came social media and with it brought more
socio
relating to human society and its members
social
 and cultural exchange. We were highly exposed to
different
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a different way
different ways
way
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 of thinking day in and day out. With that kind of exposure scholars, experts and
influencers
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 could share their opinions easily and influence others with their words and behaviour. Though the
internet
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 brought about a huge change in how we live, it
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 meant somewhere it started diluting the individual
way
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 of life. Economic exchange of goods and products was made available which helped flourish various nations. But it
also
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 meant anybody had the access to the same thing around the
world
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. The cross
polination
transfer of pollen from the anther to the stigma of a plant
pollination
 of products and ideas started blurring the lines of
indivisuality
the quality of being individual
individuality
. Now it is very tough to differentiate between people from various nations, because they all look the same and have
similar thought process
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a similar thought process
.
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Internet
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The internet
 has not only blurred the lines of culture, it is slowly influencing the ideas of people around the
world
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. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 feel and I agree that thought
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internet added
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internet, added
 value to our lives and increased our spending power, unfortunately it has not only blurred the lines of culture but it is slowly influencing the thoughts of people around the
world
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. We should take note of
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 change before it is too late to realise that we all have turned into a replica of each other and there is not difference left.
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