The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revenant.
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The first bar chart compares two reasons for
study
conforming student’s
Change preposition
to student’s
age
. The second
bar chart provides the percentage of support
given by the
employers to those Correct article usage
apply
students
.
Firstly
, it’s clearly
that Replace the word
clear
students
under 39 study
to possibly achieve a good Change to a plural noun
studies
career
in the future. In contrast
students
over 49 tend to study
for interest more than for a career
. However
, the graph demonstrates that the percentage of studying for a career
has declined whereas
studying
for interest’s percentage has increased over the Correct article usage
the studying
age
groups. Surprisingly, half of the students
from
between 40 to 49 tend to Change preposition
apply
study
for interest and the other half studies
to get a Fix the agreement mistake
study
career
.
Secondly
, an analysis of the second
bar chart depict
that Change the verb form
depicts
students
under 26, have the most employer support
than any others. Although
the age
group 30-39 received less time off and help with the fees, it demonstrates a slightly
rise Change the adverb
slight
of
Change preposition
in
the
employer Correct article usage
apply
support
over the next
age
groups
.
Fix the agreement mistake
group
Overall
, younger students
study
to pursue a career
and have more support
by
Change preposition
from
the
employers than older Correct article usage
apply
students
.Submitted by Beatriz Gomes on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, age, support, students, career with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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