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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It has been a said complication whether the responsibility should be laid on the shoulder of governments or individuals in public. Despite the longitudinal period of
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 debated problem standing,
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 do think that the joining hands of both may be the best remedy. Regarding to the governments
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 if those in power can fully utilize their macro-scaled acts through increasing taxes upon the single-use plastics and the excessive use of motorized vehicles, the environmental problems
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 one of which is air pollution, may be mitigated. To set the exemplar, it can be seen from many enacted legislation mainly involved in
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environmental
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 those have contributed to the massive decrease in the amount of emitted carbon dioxide.
This
 has posed a promising measure under the actions of authorities. As for the members of
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the public
, undeniably promising as it seems to assess the potential part of those to offset the environmental threat. Garbages can be considered as the most visible difficulty worsening the state of habitats
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 According to some certain UK statistics
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 there are more than 15% livable places that are badly damaged by the severity of waste.
This
 has led to the increasing loss of both aquatic and terrestrial lands. So
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 if the residents do have the sufficient awareness of taking action to lead to rarely
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throw
 rubbish, the eco-wreck can be alleviated
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 which may
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contribute
 to the rejuvenation of lands
futuristically
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