Nowadays children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some people think that these activities are not good for a child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, watching
televison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
and playing
video
games has become a favourite hobby of many children. Most people argue that watching movies and playing
video
games excessively can have a negative impact on
children's mind
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the child's mind
child's mind
a child's mind
. I completely agree with
this
statement because
of some legitimate reasons
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some legitimate reasons
which will be discussed in
this
essay. It has been observed over
years
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the years
that failure in
video
games can cause serious damage to children's mental health. A child
often start
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often starts
feeling less confident as well as sad when he
loose
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looses
any
video
game and
such
consecutive failures can often lead to
dipression
a mental state characterized by a pessimistic sense of inadequacy and a despondent lack of activity
depression
, which is a serious mental illness. Studies suggest that these failures can even cause dire consequences among teenagers
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, recently it was reported in The
hindu
of or relating to or supporting Hinduism
Hindu
, a leading newspaper of India, that a child attempted suicide after failing in one of the
video
games, named PUBG.
In addition
to that, watching negative content on Television can
also
have a damaging impact on young minds. Children often feel inspired to execute a crime when they watch any crime show or movie. To state an example, in the past, police had found that many juvenile did the crime after watching a
voilent
acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity
violent
movie or show based on criminal story.
Furthermore
,
often many children
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many children often
start having trust issues after watching several stories of family
betrayel
an act of deliberate betrayal
betrayal
betrayals
. In conclusion,
video
games and television shows can harm the developing mind of children by feeding them with negative as well as
voilent
acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity
violent
content.
Therefore
, parents must control and supervise their children's activities to avoid any
mishappening
in the future.
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