A report indicated that many children between 7 and 11 spend too much time watching tv or playing video games.How does the problem affect the hildren,their families and society?What measures can be taken to control it?

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the advancement

of technology young

ones

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one's

age ranges from 7to 11 take many hours in streaming television as well as use gadgets for playing E-games.The effect of

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platforms

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platform

has been an alarming that affect child’s social life and overall well-being.

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intends

is intended

to delve with the possible impact of technology to children

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family and society as well as the necessary interventions to be done to mitigate

this issues

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this issue

these issues

. At present

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children’s mind

has easily corrupted

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easily corrupted

easily corrupts

by the outside influences and due to modern apps most of children exposed to it

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will greatly affect child’s physical

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mental and

paychological

mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature

psychological

health.Spending too much time playing games will result to health problems like

ete

the organ of sight

eye

strain

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lack of sleep

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obesity and irritable like

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

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they

become less productive to

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become less productive

society as they do not participate in family gatherings and

also

social activities

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their community disrupting social relationships. In order to solve

this problems

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this problem

these problems

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a required action should be done by parents like encouraging children to participate in family events

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communicates well

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with

their children daily and raising the awareness of children the detrimental outcome of irresponsible using of modern devices. In conclusion

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media contributes to

child’s development

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the child’s development

a child’s development

and uncontrolled use of these

technology

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technologies

should be monitored by the family.Parental guidance and supervision

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their children is a must.

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A report indicated that many children between 7 and 11 spend too much time watching tv or playing video games.How does the problem affect the hildren,their families and society?What measures can be taken to control it?

Fully explain your ideas

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