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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries.

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It is considered by some that, free movement of products an across national borders has long been a controversial problem. Well, there are others who think that have a badly affect the local production. Many arguments have been made for and against free trade between nations. On the one hand, it may give an opportunity to
established
Suggestion
establish
 a broad trading relationship to the other countries. Exporting products may raise the
custom
Suggestion
customary
 revenue of the
country
 because before the investors have their merchandise to the local market, they have to pay for the allotted taxes
as a result
, these taxes may help to increase the gross sales of the
country
.
On the other hand
, people may use of the import goods rather than their own products. People tend to buy these kinds of goods because they think that it have a
more high
Suggestion
higher
highest
 quality standard. The local industries decline, many
establishment
Suggestion
establishments
 and businesses tend to close their production due to decreasing profit. And more people lose their jobs after that. Many countries produce a high fee product,
therefore
, poor countries cannot afford. In
this
 case, those countries should by receiving a portion of money as a fee to cross the borders. One may conclude that exporting and importing goods may have
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 and
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 effects in a
country
. I think, if more attention is paid and the government supports local industries, it will be beneficial for both people and the
country
's income.
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