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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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We are living in a time when people  all around the world have the possibility of having a
car
. I think everyone who wants it can buy one. On the other 
hand we
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hand, we
 can see that traffic is getting bigger and bigger
everyday
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every day
. In the following essay I will take a look at
this
 problem and describe my point of view about what the government can do to decrease the
use
 of cars. Nowadays, in every big city
such
 as New York, London and Berlin we can see lots of traffic jams. I remember when I was living in Moscow, the capital of Russia, it was an absolutely usual situation when I was spending more than 2 hours to go to my job and two hours to go home.
Finally
, I decided to simply sell my
car
 because it had no logic to
use
 it, and I started to
use
 public transport.  In some countries we can already see the decision and it is absolutely easy and logical. For instance in Holland they have a really good bicycle infrastructure which includes roads, parkings and services. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
  really works. It is getting harder and harder to have a
car
 in Amsterdam. As we can see, they do not have many parking places and they are not free at all, people have to have a special
papire
a material made of cellulose pulp derived mainly from wood or rags or certain grasses
paper
 to go to the city
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 and they are going to do even more, it will not be possible to come to the Amsterdam old town by
car
 from 2023. I strongly believe that a mix of public transport and
bicycles
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bicycle
 infrastructure is the answer. When people see that it is really easy to
use
 bikes or scooters
instead
 of cars, they can try and get used to it really soon.
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