Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some people argue the parents should encourage their children to participate in organized group activities in their own leisure time. While others may argue that children must be able to figure out for themselves how to do it own their own. In
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diferences
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benefecial
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they act upon what is right for them and for others.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that exposing children to the external environment with other children will help them positively.Linking Words
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