Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Companies nowadays when they interview, they may ask the interviewee about personal
informations
a message received and understood
information
such
as their hobbies, interests and
also
their marriage statuses. Some people agree and some do not. The debate is still on and I will give my idea about
this
topic. Checking people personal
life
is may not polite, especially to who that you just know.
Besides
that, the private
life
is not
also
a topic that everybody can share
to
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with
random strangers. People may not feel confident or comfortable to tell others about themselves because they think they may scare people out.
Nevertheless
, nowadays interviewers sexually attack interviewees or employees is not new anymore. Asking about private information can make some people weird out and get
scare
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scared
.
For example
, in 2012 a director sexually
assulted
close fighting during the culmination of a military attack
assaulted
his interviewee after knowing that she is single. I think those are some reasons why people are still shy and
disageed
be of different opinions
disagreed
with those kind of questions.
However
,
base
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based
on my
knowlege
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
, getting to know more about
people
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the people
who will work for you is completely right because
company
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a company
the company
companies
can understand the workers and offer more for them right from the start.
Thus
, interviewers can pick the suitable workers for
company
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the company
companies
not only through academic
works but
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works, but
also
what they do in their leisure time because they can tell a lot about one person through that.
Besides
that, personal
life partly
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life, partly
affects working
life
,
therefore
, it is
understable
to know why companies often ask questions about personal information.
For instance
, nursing major usually employs young and single women because they
are not relied
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do not rely
don't rely
on their family especially kids.
Therefore
, they can work long shifts without any
worriness
be worried, concerned, anxious, troubled, or uneasy
worries
awareness
. In my opinion, it is normal for the interviewers asking about
private
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the private life
life
because it is relevant and useful for
recuiter
One who requites
requiter
reciter
.
However
, people should be bright to the question that having
assulting
close fighting during the culmination of a military attack
assaulting
meaning. Overall, I think people should be open with those activities when they interview so that they can find a perfect company for themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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