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Band 3.5

The graphs below show the growth in wages within the G7 Nations between 2000-2007 and 2008-2012.

The graphs below show the growth in wages within the G7 Nations between 2000-2007 and 2008-2012.
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Both figures below reveal the payrolls of how a special and rich group of countries during two periods, 2000 to 2007, and 2008 to 2012.
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, it can be seen that the UK started the series with
highest
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the highest
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 growth
over
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of over
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 5%, followed by the US with
rates
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 near 3,5
in
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apply
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and Canada with 3% in the first period. European nations showed started with a minor rate
,
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 but stayed more stable during all periods, except Italy. Japan oscillated your wage
rates
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 all time that was analysed. Canada, the US, and the UK demonstrated a constant and strong trend to grow in the first period. But, later just Canada
keeping
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kept
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this
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 positive tendency. The UK plunges
your
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apply
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rates
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 through for
years
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 and achieved negative
rates
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 as -2% in 2011. The US in the same period registered two
negatives
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negative
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years
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 and a small growth from 2009 to 2011. The European G7 nation's measures had
majority
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a majority
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increased
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increase
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, except
Italy
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for Italy
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. France and Germany have a great performance during all time they registered only three
years
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 with a negative rate, France in 2008 with -02% and Germany with imperceptive decreases near 0,1% in 2004 and 2005. The
Italians
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 numbers described a distinct situation,
this
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 context represents several oscillations over the
years
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 with positive picks with 2% in 2004 and droops
like
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in
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 2011 with -2%. Japan, the only Asian nation in the G7, exhibited similar behaviour
of
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to
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 Italians,
inconstant
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with inconstant
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rates
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, in some moments
rocket
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rocketing
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 up as in 2011 with +3% and other moments
plunge
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plunging
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 as
2001
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in 2001
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 with -2%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plunges" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "oscillated" was used 2 times.
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