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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, struggling with their busy life because of the speed rhythm of the lifecycle, people substitute home-cooked
food
 by junk
food
 even their main meals. Certainly, take away cuisine allow people to save time,
however
,
t
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he overconsumption could have an irreversible effect on our health. Fast
food
 is an interesting alternative when we don’t have much time and money,
first
 of all as the name suggests in few minutes it’s possible to rustle a sandwich or a pizza even at home.
Also
, it’s available with a large range, in each corner of cities there is a
food
 shop with many choices, very easy to bolt down when people are hurried.
Moreover
, fast
food
 is really tempting, when smelling different flavours people have difficulties to resist,
furthermore
 it’s not expensive so that all categories get access.
Nevertheless
, junk
food
 has many drawbacks,
first
 because it is poor quality, as it is not nutritious and rich on fat and bad carbs, our body can’t function well.
Secondly
, it’s a bad eating habit to teach to children, they still in their growing stage so they need to eat the rainbow to construct strong bones and grow up well.
Last
, there are many health problems among the obesity, in the USA more than 50% suffer from
this
 problem, Adding cardiovascular diseases due to bad cholesterol, cancer and many other illnesses because of the chemical and
food
 preservative. To conclude, fast
food
 can help people to save time and money, but seeing the weightiness of the disadvantages discussed below which are more important than the advantages, it’s necessary to aware people about their the quality of
food
 so they can stay in shape and have a healthier life.
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