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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, many people go out of their own
country
 to study or settle permanently in a foreign
country
.
This
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one
's own nation.
One
 of the main
advantage
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 of heading overseas can be better prospects, which may be in terms of better jobs and education or a better lifestyle.
For instance
, it has been seen that physiotherapy is a profession which is gaining
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ot of recognition in countries like Canada,
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SA , so people tend to move to these countries for better job prospects. The other advantage of moving out is that it broadens
one
's horizons.
This
 way people get the chance to meet people from different cultural backgrounds and learn to cope with foreign customs and food.
This
 can make
one
 a more rounded as a person.
However
, leaving
one
's own
country
 is not a very easy task, as
one
 of the main challenges
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 the cultural differences. Every
country
 has its own culture and the differences
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 in the lifestyle,
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 conditions ,language and
also
 food habits. Sometimes it is very difficult to adapt to the other culture and
this
 leads to homesickness and isolation. Another
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ssue is that it can be difficult to start a new life from scratch.
In other words
, when
one
 moves abroad, he has to make new friends and find his/her place in the community.
This
 process takes time and can be challenging if there is a language barrier to deal with. To sum up, it is good to analyze the advantages as well as the challenges before taking the decision of heading towards overseas.
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