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Most countries do not recycle their waste like paper, glass and aluminium cans. Why does this happen and what steps can be taken to encourage recycling?

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In many countries, the government prefers to recycle items in regular use, because they are aware of the environmental effects of irresponsible waste management. But it is often time not
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 with developing nations. Because of
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 public awareness, missing infrastructure for garbage recycling and no industrial regulations on raw material production. I will discuss various solutions in upcoming paragraphs for promoting recycling at various levels in a country. So first step to
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 recycling is awareness, you need people to use your waste management services responsibly. Various countries just do not recycle waste because not enough people are interested
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 activities. The government can put an advertisement on television and
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 about the positive effects of recycling on our environment.
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, regular recycling of paper
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 can lead to fewer forest trees chopping. And various educational materials
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 as books, notebooks and newspapers can become really cheap in terms of pricing.
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 educating the young generation on
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 subject, in schools and colleges will create demand for recycling facilities. Many developing nations can't afford to build infrastructure for recycling for everyone. In
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 what can be done is,
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 various alternatives for handling discarded items. In
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 government can purchase these discarded raw materials and sell them to industries. So financially poor
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 can have passive income for
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 developing recycling methods and technologies. Another popular way of promoting recycling in industries is by rewarding them with recycling management points. If a business utilises more recycled material they are allowed to have tax relief or access to various subsidies.
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 regulating the use of certain raw materials, without using them with recycled
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, can help to reduce unwanted gas emissions.
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 is the case with raw aluminium production because it creates lots of smoke during the hardening process over the high temperature in a furnace.
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 that to encourage recycling, the nation has to promote it at various levels which include
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 public and industries as well.
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