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Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people ate only the local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Food
 is necessary for survival. These days, many consumers purchase eatables that travel a long distance. I opine that we must prefer vegetables that are locally produced rather than importing. I will substantiate my views in the following paragraphs. Nowadays, global warming is a highly debated topic. How rare fossil fuels are being burnt for transportation.
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remendous amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere which leads to pollution. In my opinion
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this
 is not a feasible option. Eating locally produced agrarian products not only helps in providing employment but
also
 helps in developing the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) of a nation. Locally manufactured consumable items are plucked when they are ripe whereas imported
food
 items are plucked when they are raw and through chemicals
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they are artificially ripened.
Thus
, a lot of chemicals enter our human body.
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the government has no control over the use of pesticides during farming, which
then
 enters the
food
 chain causing health issues.
First
 of all, consuming only locally grow
food
 limits our
food
 variety.
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some
food
 items cannot be grown locally.
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, fruits like grapes need
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old climate while fruits like banana need a warm climate to grow.
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, developing countries produce
food
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heaper rate than the ones grown in developed countries.
Moreover
, introducing a non-native vegetable has its own disadvantages as it spreads like
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 completely destroying native plants. To recapitulate, importing perishable
food
 items not only reduces our economy but
also
 increases our dependency on foreign countries.
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 the dependency on locally produced goods limit our
food
 variety I reckon
this
 to be a best practice.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmentally friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • long-distance transportation
  • biodiversity
  • pesticides
  • fertilizers
  • local economy
  • sustainability
  • feasible
  • diverse range
  • food choices
  • cultural identity
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