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In the modern world, a university education is essential in order to get a rewarding job and earn a high salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is the fact that the working market has been changed significantly due to the advance in technology. Some people think that an academic degree is a prerequisite criterion to get the honour and high-income
job
. I believe employee need to have more other skill to success not only their university training. There is no doubt that tertiary education plays a big part in professional working market.
Firstly
, university education equips students with a lot of academic knowledge that they hard to find anywhere else. In reality, most management positions often require
job
-seekers to have a bachelor or higher degrees. In recent decades, many jobs have lost each year, leading to finding a
job
 is becoming more and more competitive. Addition to
this
, robot and automatic machinery have replaced people in many manual works, higher education seems to be inevitable to get a decent business.
On the other hand
, a rewarding career is not only requiring academic knowledge. Especially in the management place, it usually requires applicants to have leading and interpersonal skills.
Therefore
, to become a competitive candidate, social and emotional intelligence is
also
 important as well.
Finally
, some people may confuse between a good
job
 with an academic career, but there still have many other lines of work requires natural talent or personal behaviour and attitude.
For example
, a vocational school can be a good place to train a good nurse, singer or dancer. In conclusion, I strongly believe that university training is important but not enough to get a rewarding
job
 with a high wage. People should prepare both relevant academic degrees and experience before applying to a
job
.
Submitted by Trinh Vuong on

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