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Many people are working at home rather than work places. Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families but other suggest it will cause stress in the home rather than work place. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
this
 modern era, the world is changing a lot as compared to the past. Due to
this
 technological development employees are able to work from anywhere. People have a different opinion regarding
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the
workers
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 workplace. I personally believe that working from home has numerous advantages for everyone. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view. Commencing with, every coin has two sides "one is positive while another is negative".
Firstly
, when someone doing their
job
 at home
then
 he is able to take care of his children and other family members.
Secondly
,
this
 thing
also
 saves
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erson's travelling time and due to
this
 reason they can easily spend more time on
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ob. They can do
this
 thing very easily. Because they don't need to depend on anyone at that time. Mainly,
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orker's family can easily get their help in any emergency situation. As per
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xford
university
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 report, 75 percentage
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employees living
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appy family life who are working from house. On contrary, some people
also
 have a different mentality. They are believing that working from
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wn place is more hectic. In some points, they are not wrong. Apart from
this
 , everyone needs change for their comfort. So they can easily focus on their
job
.
Moreover
, when we are doing
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ob at our place, it
cause
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ake of freedom for us and our other family members. These are some darkest side of it. To conclude, In my opinion, plus points of doing
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ob from home are more than drawbacks. So
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overnment must have to encourage everyone for
this
 and it is beneficial for the society as well for the country.
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