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One problem face by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

#face #city #traffic #congestion
Indeed
traffic
 congestion is one of the biggest problem faced by almost every larger
city
 in the world and it is irritating for every citizen residing in the
city
. I have briefed the major causes and problems related to it. The main cause of
traffic
 congestions is narrowed roads, unlimited cars running throughout the day in a
city
, not proper management of issuing a new car,
traffic
 rules are not been implemented properly. I believe
first
 of all public transport should be improved. A country like India where we have 30billion population only an unmitigated public transport is a solution.
Secondly
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the issuance of new cars should be
also
 monitored. It is a need of the time to put forth the rules on the purchase of new personal transport. The
traffic
 rules should
also
 be implemented diligently and proper management of
city
 structure should be planned. The unlimited vehicles on road
also
 contribute to the emission of greenhouse gases which isn't healthy for life on earth
also
 one of the key contributors to global warming. In conclusion, I
second
 my outlook that public transportation should be improved
also
 every citizen should be properly informed of the impact of their action if they don't follow the rules.
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