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There is growing evidence that man made activities are making global temperature higher. what might be the man made cause of temperature rising how can we deal with this problem?

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Nowadays, men are exploiting natural environment badly with their activities. Some of these activities cause an increase in global warming. Due to which
temprature
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temperature
 of the earth is ascending and
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other creatures. In
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 essay,I will elucidate various artificially made factor which is manipulation our atmosphere.
To begin
 with, industrialization is one of the most important factors in global warming. Especially the waste product of these industries like gases is emitted directly into the air. Which causes an add on to our planet
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temperature
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ncrease in
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temperature
. To illustrate it
further
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reenhouse effect is caused when gases are trapped in
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ower atmosphere. These gases in huge quantities warm our planet and result in global warming.
Secondly
, deforestation and extensive use of vehicles
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also
 one of the leading factors in raising the earth
temprature
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temperature
. Due to unwise and unplanned cutting of trees fresh air has been replaced. We can tackle
this
 problem with the help of government as well as with the cooperation of electronic, print and social media. The government should implement policies for industries to recycle their raw products and make them less harmful
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 the environment. As well as measures must be taken against cutting of trees. Media can play its role by composing
such
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 people. Seminars should be arranged where should address
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the harmful effect of global warming. To sum up, men have destroyed lots of natural environment and create problems for itself and for others. To mitigate these issues it is quintessential that government take serious steps and impose strict laws.
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