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Water is a natural resource that should always be free. Governments should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Another point here is that by
rising
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 retirement age, many healthy, old workers can continue their job until they feel sick, by doing
this
, they can continue to contribute
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the tax system.
This
,
consequently
, reduces the authority's financial strain and they could spend
this
 fund for
much pressing
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 issues
such
 as building roadways, hospitals and educational institutions.
Additionally
, the government should implant a habit of saving in their people, which can be utilized when the individual reaches his
last
 days for his medical expenses.
Otherwise
, the youth's hard work may go to the rehabilitation of the older generation, which would result
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huge financial imbalance in the near future of the country. Another point here is that by
rising
Correct your spelling
raising
show examples
 retirement age, many healthy, old workers can continue their job until they feel sick, by doing
this
, they can continue to contribute
Verify preposition usage
to
show examples
the tax system.
This
,
consequently
, reduces the authority's financial strain and they could spend
this
 fund for
much pressing
Add a hyphen
much-pressing
show examples
 issues
such
 as building roadways, hospitals and educational institutions.
Additionally
, the government should implant a habit of saving in their people, which can be utilized when the individual reaches his
last
 days for his medical expenses.
Otherwise
, the youth's hard work may go to the rehabilitation of the older generation, which would result
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
huge financial imbalance in the near future of the country. Another point here is that by rising retire ment age, many healthy, old workers can continue their job until they feel sick, by doing
this
, they can continue to contribute
Verify preposition usage
to
show examples
the tax system.
This
,
consequently
, reduces the authority's financial strain and they could spend
this
 fund for
much pressing
Add a hyphen
much-pressing
show examples
 issues
such
 as building roadways, hospitals and educational institutions.
Additionally
, the government should implant a habit of saving in their people, which can be utilized when the individual reaches his
last
 days for his medical expenses
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