People in the lime light have a responsibility to set an example for others by their good behaviour. Do you agreee?
Some people say that famous people should represent good traits to be model roles for others. I totally agree with
this
statement, because those celebs have a huge impact on children and foreign people.
Social media has exposed everything at our fingertips. Young people will follow their favourite artist or actress in those platforms. For example
, Many of
celebs have Twitter and Instagram accounts which have millions of followers. Verify preposition usage
apply
In addition
, if an artist upload
a picture that contains Change the verb form
uploads
alcohol
beverages, that will encourage their fans to try it. Recent research has found out that the majority of users of those platforms were minor people. Replace the word
alcoholic
Also
, many posts may have porn. Which have a damaging effect on children's brains.
Many Change the punctuation
?
of
celebs have international fame. So they represent their country and culture. Verify preposition usage
apply
For example
, if foreign people follow an actress and he/she has a bad habits
, they will think that Correct the article-noun agreement
bad habits
a bad habit
a
ctress's society Add an article
the
also
have
those habits. And that Change the verb form
has
misrepresnt
that country traditions and reputation. Correct your spelling
misrepresent
misrepresents
For instance
, some of
Verify preposition usage
apply
t
ourism association make a survey on Add an article
the
it
customers and found out that many Change the pronoun
its
of
people avoid Verify preposition usage
apply
specefic
country because some famous people represent a harmful impact Correct your spelling
specific
for
their Verify preposition usage
on
traditionals
.
To conclude, I Correct your spelling
traditional
highy
believe that those people who have fame should be careful of their attitudes because they have a massive impact on teenagers and stranger people.Correct your spelling
highly
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite