People in the lime light have a responsibility to set an example for others by their good behaviour. Do you agreee?

Some people say that famous people should represent good traits to be model roles for others. I totally agree with
this
statement, because those celebs have a huge impact on children and foreign people. Social media has exposed everything at our fingertips. Young people will follow their favourite artist or actress in those platforms.
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celebs have Twitter and Instagram accounts which have millions of followers.
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a picture that contains
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beverages, that will encourage their fans to try it. Recent research has found out that the majority of users of those platforms were minor people.
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, many posts may have porn. Which have a damaging effect on children's brains
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celebs have international fame. So they represent their country and culture.
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, they will think that
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ctress's society
also
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those habits. And that
misrepresnt
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misrepresent
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that country traditions and reputation.
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t
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ourism association make a survey on
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customers and found out that many
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people avoid
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specific
country because some famous people represent a harmful impact
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their
traditionals
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traditional
. To conclude, I
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believe that those people who have fame should be careful of their attitudes because they have a massive impact on teenagers and stranger people.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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