A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is argued that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
work satisfaction is important than a hefty salary.
This
Linking Words
essay totally disagrees with that statement. According to me, high salaried positions are directly affecting people's stress adversely and steers towards various well-being issues
such
Linking Words
as anxiety. Whereas, employment happiness stays above the money earned People on higher positions at employment are having finite time to perform their duties and achieve their goals which lead them towards serious illness issues. Most of the high paid employee's responsibilities are making them stressed heavily and they get body disorders like blood pressure disorder. My uncle Raj boasted about the high salary, whereas he was having a satisfactory situation. With the high paid profile, he was not able to cater to its needs and with uncomfortable experiences, he quit the post and returned to the previous one Profession satisfaction helps to have a relaxed and peaceful mind, along with better physical and mental well-being. In a relaxed environment, anyone can contribute well and improve overall productivity. It allows employees to spend quality time in leisure, with family and friends. Having
l
Add an article
a
show examples
imited amount of personal time at work allows any individual to have a better work-life balance. Any location that gives better work-life balance can yield valuable outcome professionally and eventually to
an
Change the article
a
show examples
rganization
Correct your spelling
organization
. To conclude, high paid workers are suffering from hypertension problems, and one of the reasons is having a highly result oriented stressful jobs.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, people with
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
satisfying employment are having a better work-life balance. In my opinion, I prefer to have
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
less paid, low stress and highly satisfiable work.
Submitted by dereksidh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
What to do next:
Look at other essays: