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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #work #organization #life #organizations
Dedicating your whole
life
 to an organization was quite common in the past century. Fierce work competition, the pursuit of higher living standards, and glocal opportunities have moderated that view. While some deem fit to dedicate their
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 to the same company, I believe vetting the options at hand might be fruitful, when learning and work at a
job
 get stagnant. The online world has introduced a plethora of options, from learning a new skill to finding a
job
, opportunities have never been easier. People today can switch their fields at any age to hone their passion, rather than staying at
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ob which was reasonable in past. Competition has made corporate lives political, causing more people to be stuck at menial levels bringing their career progression to a halt. Concurrently, social media adds fuel to the pain by seeing fellow's living a better
life
, amounting to frustration and detriment their self-confidence. Various studies have delineated that in the past decade numbers of
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ob switch have bolstered by 30%, and the aforementioned factors are the major reasons for it. On the flip side, spending a good amount of time at a
job
 may develop relationships that can be called upon in dire needs. In various companies, long-serving employees have seen better benefits like increased holidays, company stock options, and better opportunities.
One
 can
also
 develop a comfort zone, allowing him to lead a balanced
life
,
instead
 of proving himself at every new
job
 he takes. It depends on
one
's ambitions, but staying at a company does come with its own set of perks. To recapitulate, if
one
 is satisfied with the opportunities offered at their current
job
, staying there is the right choice. But if the work environment gets too toxic for
one
's progression, switching jobs till
one
 finds the right match shouldn't be viewed as bad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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